修改英语学习计划作文MynameisDaniel.IcomefromGuangzhou,whichissituatedinsouthofHongkong.Ihavegraduatedfromhighschoolthisyear.Andthen,IchoosetostudyaboardandgotoSeattle.Inmyleisuretime,Ienjoysingingandplayingb

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修改英语学习计划作文
My
name is Daniel.I come from Guangzhou,
which is situated in south of Hongkong.I have graduated from high school this
year.And then,I choose to study aboard and go to Seattle.In my leisure time,I enjoy singing
and playing basketball.I hope I can get accustomed to live in Seattle as quickly as possible
In
this day and age,an increasing number of students go aboard to study.
Notwithstanding a great number of famous universities which are located in my
country,such as Peking university and Hongkong
university.In my opinion,American tertiary education is outstanding in the
world.Many splendid scientists have studied in America.Bill Gates said “Book is
just a tool,In terms of getting the kids work together and motivate them,the
teacher is the most important.” Teacher plays a vital role in schooling.Many
excellent scientists who got the Nobel prize teach students in college,enable students
to acquire knowledge and precious experience,it is of considerable
significance to students growing up.So I come to America to study
My
plan is improving my English skills firstly.And then,I will study at SCCC to
take my associate bachelor degree.Finely,I will transfer to another 4-years
university in the USA.
My friend tells me,Kaplan is an excellent language school.Outstanding
teachers,nice environment and good location which is close to UW.You can
effectively enhance your English skills.So I apply to Kaplan.And then,I will
study at college.Honestly speaking,I am not sure which
university I can go to,it hinges on my GPA.However,I want to study Environment
Science.At current,many anthropogenic activities foul the air,contaminate
the water and devastate the forest.I love to travel,nature and enjoy
geography.I want to protect our earth and deal with these issues.So I want to
take Environment Science as my major for my bachelor’s degree
I
hope I can achieve my goal in Seattleand have a good life

Answer 1

I come from Guangzhou,which is situated in south of Hongkong——》I come from Guangzhou,which lies on the south of Hongkong.
I hope I can get accustomed to live——>get accustomed to living.
an increasing number of students go aboard to study——>the number of students go to abroad to study is increasing .
American tertiary education is outstanding. ——>outstanding 用来形容人,最好换个词;
who got the Nobel prize teach students in college——>...are teaching..
it is of considerable significance to——>it is a considerable significance for sb.
So I come to America to study ——>最好换个句子格式.
Finely——>finally
My friend tells me——>told
So I apply to Kaplan...——>用来申请获得某些权力.
.很多句子应该换个格式.语法注意一下 !