请专业人士改错20100729Always,Tomascan’tcontroltheaccelerationofheartbeatwhileabeautyisstandingby.Hewon’tbearthestrongbeatsinhischestlikeacrazybeast.So,asarichman,hewillbidforthenightsharedwiththatbeauty

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请专业人士改错20100729
Always,Tomas can’t control the acceleration of heart beat while a beauty is standing by.
He won’t bear the strong beats in his chest like a crazy beast.
So,as a rich man,he will bid for the night shared with that beauty.
You know,some girls can be beaten down easily and bend themselves to money

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我也看不出哪里错了,我也来请教!