求批改~~我写的那个演讲稿.求大师修改啊~~在线等啊等啊、、Goodafternoon.everyone.Iknowthatallofushaveadreamrootedinourheart.sodoi.wheniwasachild,iwasdreamingtobecomeateacher.becauseilikethefeeli

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求批改~~我写的那个演讲稿.求大师修改啊~~在线等啊等啊、、
Good afternoon.everyone. I know that all of us have a dream rooted in our heart. so do i. when i was a child, i was dreaming to become a teacher. because i like the feeling when i was speaking infront of my students.when i first started, i had all the passion i had to take the first step. i participated many activities to gain my courage to speak in public. as time pass by, i realized that it was really hard for me to do like this. i was so shy and lacking of confidence. to make matters worse, i even found many other people were better than me. at that time i was under great a pressure . however, i don't want my dream to be just a dream. and i know i should strive to achieve my dream. so this why i ,now ,standing on this stage. i just want to show myself to all of you, and take in some precious experience.
i drawn a conclusion from my experience, that is , passion to some extend means pressure, no passion, no pressure, no pressure, no motivation. therefore, passion brings up the dream, pressure helps you strive.thank you for listening.

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Good afternoon,everyone.I know that all of us have dreams rooted in our hearts.so do i.when i was a child,i dreamed to be a teacher.because i like the feeling when i speaking in front of my students.s...