请帮忙看看这篇英文文章的错误在哪里.是否有错误需要修改,DearLily,IamwritingtoyoutointroduceanEnglishbookconcerningletterwritingwhichisnottooexpensiveandverypracticalforyoutoldmeyouwouldliketochoos

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请帮忙看看这篇英文文章的错误在哪里.是否有错误需要修改,
Dear Lily,
I am writing to you to introduce an English book concerning letter writing which is not too expensive and very practical for you told me you would like to choose a book to learn letter writing last time.
The book named "Letters Written for You" totally written by Mr.Chen who is a professor from Fudan University.The book contains varities of froms of letters.For instance,a letter wrote for apologize or most scicere thanks and so on.
It is really a useful book to you to learn writing.I hope my suggestions can do you a favour.
Faithfully yours,
Li Ming
I do really be thoughtful by the above pictures,as these vivid cartoon depicted a popularized phenomenon concerning today's children.A beautiful flower seems very well on account of the flower is hiding inside the protect of greenhouse.No winding,no rainy.It grows booming.In the first picture dipicted above contents.However,the second picture,without the protect of greenhouse,the flower was shrucking.
Just as today's children,they are health and happy because their parents solved all the difficult things which their children faced.But these parents didn't find children couldn't accept or solve all of the disordered stiuation by themselves.
Parents should not show their best love to children and also should not do everthing for their children.No difficults,no grow!

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Dear Lily,
Since you have told me you wanted to learn letter writing last time,I'd like to introduce you an English book which is about letter writing .This book is not so expensive and very practical,and its name is "Letters Written for You".It is written by Mr.Chen who is a professor from Fudan University.The book contains varities of froms of letters.For instance,apologizing letter,thanks letter and so on.
It may be a useful book for you to learn writing.I hope my suggestions will be valuable for you.
Faithfully yours,
Li Ming
只改一篇,太困了去睡觉了.别用太多定语从句,显得罗嗦和生硬,还容易出错.英语要尽量摆脱中式英语.