麻烦帮我看看有没有错误和需要改进的地方.还有能否扩充一点,我觉得太短了.MynameisXiangLee.I'dliketoapplyforstudyingKoreaninKWANGWOONUniversity.Ihaveastronginterestininternationaltrade.Myfamily-ownedc

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麻烦帮我看看有没有错误和需要改进的地方.还有能否扩充一点,我觉得太短了.My name is Xiang Lee.I'd like to apply for studying Korean in KWANGWOON University.I have a strong interest in international trade.My family-owned company would like to promote our own products to all over the world,which requires me to master multinational languages.I wish to speak Korean fluently.Thus,I enjoy and want to study in your university.After I have the mastery of Korean,I would stay in KWANGWOON University for further study.

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应该没有 再介绍下自己特长吧 外国人似乎挺看重特长的