求大神帮忙修改英文信件各位，我英语水平比较烂，现在正在突击联系，准备用英文回复邮件，下面是我要表达的内容及我写的一个初稿，恳请大神多多指点。亲爱的黄教授谢谢您的关心。

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求大神帮忙修改英文信件
各位，我英语水平比较烂，现在正在突击联系，准备用英文回复邮件，下面是我要表达的内容及我写的一个初稿，恳请大神多多指点。
亲爱的黄教授
谢谢您的关心。
我和xx聊天的时候了解到，她每周需要支付$150的房租。如果不能兼职的话，去掉20%的税收，这意味着我每周只剩$200，我想问下我还需要自己准备多少钱以维持生活。
关于实习的事情，现在还没有收到消息，剩下的时间是否足够。
关于论文评阅的事情我会在周五前完成。
Dear Prf. Huang
Thanks for your attention.
When I talked with xx recently, I learned that, she need pay $150 for her tenement every week. If part-time work is not allowed, it means that the disposable income is only $200. I'd like to know that how much extra mony will be needed.
About the internship, I haven't heard any thing from it, whether the time is still enough? If I need to send a resume to him.
Ps: The paper review work will be finished before Friday.
Xiaolong.

Answer 1

, she need pay$150 for her tenement every week改为xx needs to pay $150 a week in rent.
the disposable income is改为my disposable income will be
I'd like to know that how much extra mony will be needed改为I'd like to know how much extra money I will need to live on.
About the internship改为As for my internship
I haven't heard any thing from it, 改为I have not received any messages about it.
whether the time is still enough?Is there still enough time for me?
If I need to send a resume to him.改为Should I send a resume to him?
Ps: The paper review work will be finished before Friday.改为And as for my dissertation appraisal,I think I can manage to finish it by Friday.
署名Xiaolong.上一行加上Sincerely，
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