各路豪侠可不可以帮我挑挑这篇英语自我的毛病!急用!GoodmorningItisreallymyhonortohavethisopportunityforthiscompete.IhopeIcanmakeagoodperformancetoday.I'mconfidentthatIcansucceed.Nowiwillintroducemysel

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各路豪侠可不可以帮我挑挑这篇英语自我的毛病!急用!
Good morning
It is really my honor to have this opportunity for this compete.I hope I can make a good performance today.I'm confident that I can succeed.
Now i will introduce myself briefly
I’m a student in the No.9 middle school.A school famous for foreign language.I’m a optimistic girl,I can smile almost in every situation.I believe everything eventually will goes well.I’m a honest girl .I never tell a lie.I think this is one of my advantages.I interest in reading ,swimming ,running,surfing to the internet and play piano .When I feel tired ,I often play piano to relax myself .Of all the things I like sleeping.You know,the students in China are always short of sleeping time.En,I admit I am a girl who isn’t very diligence,but when I make up my mind to do somethings ,I believe that I can concentration in it.
This is me,a girl don’t prefect but honey girl .that all.Thanks.
这是我要参加比赛的稿子~多提提意见也好

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.用I 太多了,注意语法.
I’m a（是an) optimistic girl
有些废话
I’m a honest girl .I never tell a lie.两句意思一样.
（我很诚实,我从不撒谎）
不如你先用中文打稿再翻成英文,你的文章有点怪怪的.