英语作文帮忙修改很着急,WhenIwasyoung,mygrandmothertoldme,'ifwegive1001luckystarstosomeone,thatpersoncanfulfillhisorherdream.'ItwasmyfirstintheUniversity,Ifeltverynervous.AndIwaslateformyfirstclass,soI

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英语作文帮忙修改 很着急,
When I was young,my grandmother told me,'if we give 1001 lucky stars to someone,that person can fulfill his or her dream.'
It was my first in the University,I felt very nervous.And I was late for my first class,so I ran to the classroom.When I ran in the corner,I hit him.I said 'Sorry,Sorry...' He just smiled and said," I'm fine" I love him at the first sign.Then I knew his name,major and many other things.We became a friend.
I folded those stars,and gave him when he graduated the University.I can't remember how long it made.And now he is my boyfriend,but I will never tell him that I wroten words in every star,such as I LOVE YOU and GOOD LUCK.

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第一段第一行that前不能加逗号：第二段如果要用强调句就要将university后的逗号改为that:第二段第二行ran in 要改成ran around比较好：第二段第三行love应该为loved,sign应该为sight,major我觉得应该删掉:第二段第四...