托福作文求指教!能得几分呢?Thecollegeyearsarethebesttimeinaperson’slife.Doyouagreeordisagreewiththisstatement?Collegeyears,thoughconsideredbymanyasthebesttimeinaperson’slifebecausepeoplearemostenergeti

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托福作文求指教!
能得几分呢?
The college years are the best time in a person’s life.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
College years,though considered by many as the best time in a person’s life because people are most energetic,free of burdens and can acquire much knowledge during this period of time,I,as a college student,don’t agree with the idea.Collage years are good,but certainly not best.
Compared with the years when we are children,college years put people under great pressure.College students not only face competitiveness from their classmates but also are confronted with pressure from the job market,which is becoming increasingly fierce.When people are at a very young age,they are protected by their parents in any cases,free of worries.
Compared with the years when people are at their thirties or forties,collage years cannot provide much material wealth.Most college students can secure a comparatively well-paid job and lead a stable life after graduating from school for decades.At that stage of life,they can at least buy what they like without worrying about lunch.However,most average college students should save money for months to buy some expensive items,such as a cell phone.
Also,college students struggle in interpersonal relations.It is said that collage is like a small society,where students can first experience how to deal with interpersonal skills.However,college students are still not mature enough to deal with complicated interpersonal relations.Their values and outlooks on world may be distorted if they cannot get help from adults while relating with some kind of sophisticated people.
By any standards,college years are not the best time in a person’s life,but I still contend that college years will be one of the most important periods of time during my lifetime because I have learned much knowledge and many practical skills during this period of time.

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这个的和上次那个有一个共同问题我上次说到过的.
本文从3各方面论证,其实没必要,只要2个方向就好,如果要3个,最后一个应该一带而过,你这3个方面字数相当,不能分出主次.
正确做法,删掉其中一个方面,对剩余2各方面进行更加detailed的论证,具体做法是加入实例.
还有问题可以问我