托福作文求评分啊～从看到题目开始计时的,30分钟内写完的～有什么问题,大概几分?Undeniably,bymakingfriendswithpeoplewhohaveagoodsenseofhumor,humanscanbenefitmoreformboththeeconomyandintimacytoalarg

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托福作文求评分啊～从看到题目开始计时的,30分钟内写完的～有什么问题,大概几分?
Undeniably,by making friends with people who have a good sense of humor,humans can benefit more form both the economy and intimacy to a large extent.As far as I’m concerned,there are two main reasons for the opinion that making friends with humorous people is better than with intelligent people.
To begin with,people can feel more relaxed and happy with humorous people.The screen strikes me now is one of my best friends Mr.Yuannoa Nini.He is a very humorous man and always tells us some jokes.One day,when Mr.Yuannoa Nini,3 of my classmates and I had dinner in a restaurant.There were too many people at that time,so we got our dish very slowly.After waiting for 10 minutes,all of us were hungry and anger to criticize with the manager.He came out and said:”Wo men jin tian xu yao chi bu liao dou zhe zou le.(Today,we have not enough time to have this dinner here,so we need to take the meals home.)” The rest of us found it so funny and all of us laughed together,then we began to talk about our work and forgot to just sit there to wait for the meal.
Besides,in most of the time,People need humorous friends more than any other one.A recent experiment conducted by THSC (Traffic Highway Safety Commission) said that for drivers,they should have a humorous companion.The experiment was for several groups of drivers:One group with humorous partners,other groups with different characteristic companions.And they drive for a specific long distance about 200km without spare time.The result is that drivers with humorous partners can last their sense of concentration without tire or unhappiness for about 48.75 minutes per hour while other groups is below precisely 35.33 minutes per hour.When testing the drivers rate of satisfactory (the full rate is 100% ) during the task,those with humorous ones get 91.25% while the rest is followed by 83.22%(with beautiful or handsome ones),76.31%(with ones who have high IQ scorers and a large amount of knowledge).

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大概的看了下,首先就看到的是数字,不知道你在托福的机考上写的是什么,但一般作文不可以出现3,要写three,文章结构有点问题,最少要写3个point来support你的观点