托福作文指导Somepeopleliketobuyapieceoftechnologicaldeviceassoonasitisavailableinthemarket.Otherpeopleprefertobuyitafterithasbeenusedbymanypeople.Whichdoyouprefer?Asformanypeople,thenewtechnologicaldevicesa

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Some people like to buy a piece oftechnological device as soon as it is available in the market.Other peopleprefer to buy it after it has been used by many people.Which do you prefer?
As for many people,the new technologicaldevices are so intriguing that we hope to buy them immediately.However,Ibelieve that we are supposed to buy them after they have been tried by manypeople.In this way,not only will we save money and time,we can also buy thedevices that we really need.
Obviously,buying the technological devicesafter many people has bought them is an optimum way to save our money.Becausewhen the devices are available in the market after their release,their pricesare dauntingly high.However,when many people are using them,that means thesupply and demand are balanced.At this time,the price may not be soformidable than before.For example,when the iPhone4 came to China,we weresurprised at the high price of it,which is almost 14000RMB,twice as thenormal price according to the official price.And 4 months later,many peoplehave used it and the price went down to 5000RMB.So if we choose the latterperiod to buy the devices,you will save much money.
Also,if we don't buy the stuff as soon asit is available in the market,we have more chances to choose and buy thedevices you really need.The reason is that we can find more reports about thedevices after many people use it.With those reports,we will obtain muchimportant information about the thing we want to buy,like quality,resolutionand so on.We will know many important parameters we will never know when thedevices is first available in the market.In fact,after many people complainedabout the design of the antenna of iPhone4,my father didn't buy it although Iencourage him to buy all the time.So we'd better keep calm until other peopleuse or even praise them.
What's more,without buying thetechnological device so hasty,we can save our time.Do you remember the longqueue on the Apple Store when the first generation iPad was available?Peoplethere had queued for three days.Also,buying other new devices is also a harshtask for us since they are available in a very small number of stores.We haveto spend large amount of time to find them among so much stores.You can imagehow much time you will waster.So the better choice is to buy it after manypeople has used it.
Although the new devices are a power toattract you to buy them,you had better keep calm and wait until others haveused it.Your money and time is more important than your satisfaction ofcuriosity.
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