分析下面的书面表达，指出其中的错误．下面是某中学对该校200名高中毕业生(男女各100名)的择业理想作出调查后所绘制的图表．请根据表格中情况用英语写一则报导．其中包

Question

分析下面的书面表达，指出其中的错误．

　　下面是某中学对该校200名高中毕业生(男女各100名)的择业理想作出调查后所绘制的图表．请根据表格中情况用英语写一则报导．其中包括：1．数据信息；2．男女择业的差异和共同点；3．对比最大的(striking contrast)职业．

　　Middle school students have more (1) ideas about their future jobs. The most striking contrast is in teaching: thirty percent of girls will (2) like to be teachers but (3) only five percent of boys want to be teachers. Twenty percent of boys want to be businessmen and another twenty percent want to become lawyers, but girls take up fifteen percent in these two fields.

　　That (4) boys like to do most is to become managers, comparing (5) to thirty percent of girls who want to be so. Now with the development of our society, more and more students want to be managers or bosses of some companies. Besides teaching, the second choice of girls is (6) managers. The number is not small. Girls are also expected (7) to show their ability in this field.

Answer 1

　　解题思路：(1)去掉more．因为前文未提到任何idea．

　　(2)will改为would，更符合英语表达习惯．因为 would like to…是固定短语．

　　(3)but改为 while，表示对比．

　　(4)that改为 what．因为它在主语从句中作宾语．

　　(5)comparing改为compared．这里应该是过去分词作状语，表示被动的动作．

　　(6)is后面应加上to be或to become．不然，句意不完整．

　　(7)are also expected应改为also expect．这里表示女生们“希望”……