请帮我看看这篇英语作文有没有离题!主题为“学好英语,迎大运”如果有,MeettheUniversiadeandlearnEnglishwellHelloeveryone!Iamgladtobeheretosharemyviewswithyou!IamfromClass3,Grade6,CuibeiPrimarySchool

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请帮我看看这篇英语作文有没有离题!主题为“学好英语,迎大运” 如果有,
Meet the Universiade and learn English well
Hello everyone!I am glad to be here to share my views with you!I am from Class 3,Grade 6,Cuibei Primary School.I have a lot of hobbies and my mark was always excellently.I think learn English well can be little volunteers.So if a foreign tourist ask me some questions,I can easily help him .It also can let the foreigners think our Chinese are friendly and warm.
The 26th Summer Universiade will be held in August in 2011.We should learn some knowledge about it.The stadium is in Longgang District.The mascot of the Universiade is “UU”.“UU” has a smile on her face.She is happy and colorful.“Happy U” is the emblem of the Shenzhen Summer Universiade.Everyone is excited about the Universiade.
As a Shenzhen citizen,we should protect the environment [in'vaiərənmənt] and be polite to others.We shouldn’t disrespect ['disris'pekt] our elders and we shouldn’t fight.Also remember that this civilization [,sivilai'zeiʃən] terminology[,tɜ:mə'nɔlədʒi:]:"please" "hello" "thank you" "sorry" and"good-bye” and so on.
Let us learn English well and meet the Shenzhen Summer Universiade!

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Meet the Universiade and learn English well
I am from Class 3, Grade 6,Cuibei Primary School.这句需要斟酌
I have a lot of hobbies and my mark was always excellently. 这句需要斟酌,我认为分两句比较好
I think learn English well can be little volunteers. 有两个动词,后面应该learning
So if a foreign tourist ask me some questions,I can easily help him . 语法有问题
It also can let the foreigners think our Chinese are friendly and warm.需要斟酌,中国式英语
The 26th Summer Universiade will be held in August in （in多余）
后面还可以.