关于英语写作的烦恼!我虚心接受所有批评!这是我的EASSY的一段话,帮我看文章的都说我的每一句话都要看很多遍他们才能看懂,我很苦恼这么问题,请大家指教批评!Fromtheaboveitcanbeconcludedtha

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关于英语写作的烦恼!我虚心接受所有批评!
这是我的EASSY的一段话,帮我看文章的都说我的每一句话都要看很多遍他们才能看懂,我很苦恼这么问题,请大家指教批评!
From the above it can be concluded that taking note as a useful strategy while reading foreign language has the positive effect on the comprehension of the article if the correct skill of note-taking was mastered by the reader.The most important finding in the experiment is that the group which was allowed to take notes during reading performed significantly better than the group which was not,especially for the students who have the habits of taking notes.Furthermore,to collect enough data,the questionnaire part was established,which received the data much closer with the participants.From the questionnaire,several notable outcomes were found.For example,some participants thought taking notes during the reading distracted them and prevented them having a deep understanding of the article.Videlicet,this skill is not definitely appropriate for everyone,even for people who have the habits of note-taking,because it is different among people to get highest efficiency with note-taking for different length of articles.
In general,most of the findings fit the hypothesis but there are still some limitations.The sample sizes were not large enough and the participants’ English levels were hard to control.Additionally,the limited time for experiment forced the time for participants to read,leading to some participants could not understand the article entirely.Moreover,the effect of memory still could not avoid.However,to decrease the influence of memory to the lowest,the group which was allowed to take notes but the notes were taken away before the participants do the questions was set.For further research,it was strongly recommend that informal enough samples before starting the experiment and let participants will do two different articles but at the same level of English are vitally important.In this way,the participants have the chance to concentrate on their responses on their experience of note taking condition compare to their experience in the non note taking condition,which lead the questionnaire more accurate.

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感觉读起来很累,长短句应该交错使用!这样感觉在堆词堆词组~该简练的时候尽量简练,改用it that 或者 which 代指!句型应该多变化,ing开头 啊 ,不定式开头啊,倒装啊,另外你自己读出声,看是不是通顺而不是像一口气拖得太长~