英语高手们,请帮我改下如下的英语作文!“Lifeintheuniversity”,isoneofthemostimportantthinginpeople’slife.Beforestudentsgetintotheuniversitylife,becauseofthestudy,theirslifearetotallyunderstress,however,whe

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英语高手们,请帮我改下如下的英语作文!
“Life in the university”,is one of the most important thing in people’s life.
Before students get into the university life,because of the study,theirs life are totally under stress,however,when people start to university life,they can achieve many things.Because university life isn’t restricted,each student has freedom of their life.In this freedom,they study their major which they wanted to study,they also study so many things about advanced their career.Each college student life-style aren’t same,but I think most of the students are having their own golden period.There are two parts of the activities in the university life,which are called school activities and extramural activities.School activities is only played in school,it looks like club activities,there are many clubs in the school activities,which are sports club,study club,school council,etc… Extramural activities is similar to part-time job.I think the best way of the university life is doing these two activities moderately,However,this choice will be pursued by time.In general,most of the students choose one activities.I prefer extramural activities to school activities.When I was freshman,i like school activities,but now I like extramural activities.Foreign student need more money than native student,so I do interpretation and translation job which is only for foreign student.When I began this job,so many friends and students envied me,cheered me up.While I did this job,I sometimes felt very tired,but job salary is very high,Furthermore,I met many people who is CEO of the company.In my opinion,this experience is very good for foreign students.After a year,I’m going to apply to exchange student for building up my experience,when come back to university,I will apply for president of the school council .This is my goal of university life.Although I wasted my freshman life,sophomore life is very meaningful of me.Therefore I very appreciate of myself,I want to maintain this useful time,I hope my university life will be more wonderful.

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“Life in the university”,is one of the most important thing in people’s life.
thing→things
theirs life are totally under stress
theirs→their
算了太难写了,我就改两个