帮我改下英语语法,这句句子总感觉不通外加太长、Consequently,Iagreewiththeircriticizesaboutfastfoodrestauranthiredtoomanyyoungpeopleandtheirfoodisbadforhealth,becausefastfoodiseasytobecomeaddictedandle

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帮我改下英语语法,这句句子总感觉不通外加太长 、
Consequently,I agree with their criticizes about fast food restaurant hired too many young people and their food is bad for health,because fast food is easy to become addicted and let people get lazier to cook by themselves.

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Consequently/Finally(取决于上一句的衔接,光这一句话用finally比较通顺）,I agree with their criticism about fast food restaurants that those restaurants hire too many unskilled young people and its food ...