哪位大哥大姐帮忙写篇英文自我介绍,个人英语不是很好,现在还再准备,稿子一直弄不出来,免得到时候被人家鄙视,能有个一分半钟差不多了,计算机系,软件开发,一年工作...

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哪位大哥大姐帮忙写篇英文自我介绍,
个人英语不是很好,现在还再准备,稿子一直弄不出来,免得到时候被人家鄙视,能有个一分半钟差不多了,
计算机系,软件开发,一年工作...

Answer 1

It's a pleasure to meet you all --> It's my pleasure
I'm qualified for this interview.Qualified 不是这样用的
(A qualified doctor)
简单的一句 I'am grateful(表示感谢) to be chosen for this interview 就可以了
I am graduate from shanghai donghui vocational and technical school.Graduate 已是动词.--> I graduated from...(最好加上年份,如last year,in 2006等)
major--> majored 表示过去式
"Is reading the technical college,studies is the business management specialty?" 不明白...我猜你是想说
--> I specialized in business management.我专攻商业管理
I once worked in the transport agent company as the merchandiser.Once 可以省略,我反而认为如能说出这职业为你带来了什么好处会重要些,即你在处事方面有何改善,学懂了什么技能,知识,沟通技巧,这些会对你要应徵的这份工作有什么好处,而令主持面试者觉得你有能力胜任这工作
--> Having worked in a transportation agency,(用a,因之前没有提过是哪一公司,用agency,已代表了这机抅,用transportation,因我看到外国的都是这么叫) I have learnt to cooperate with (合作) one another,I have improved my communication skills which will help me work efficiently.(有效率地)
adaptive capacity is strong --> my adaptive capacity is high
"it is serious to work?" 不明白...还是你是想说这对工作很重要?
--> These qualities (素质) are very important.
my hobby is at writting,reading,singing and traveling.--> My hobbies are writing,reading,singing and traveling.
或地道些 --> Writing,reading,singing and traveling are my favorites (所爱好的).I enjoy them very much.
I am very interested in this position 这句感觉怪怪的...英文来说只是表现出你对这工作感兴趣
--> I really would like to be a/an___(工作名称),which can certainly(肯定) provide me with more chances and challenges (chances 和 challenges 都是可以数的,而整句都能让人感到你的热诚)
thanks all of you for giving this chance for stating my wishes (这句只是犯了文法上的错误)
--> Thanks to all of you for giving me this chance to state my wishes.(this chance to deliver my speech 可能会好些)
或--> Thank you all for...
I do wish that I can become a qualified staff in the position I applied for.Qualified 后面通常会用doctor,teacher这些专业,很少用staff这泛称
--> I do hope(hope较wish来得实际) that I can become a qualified___(一种专业) in the future.Should I be fortunate enough to be chosen for this position,(意指如果我能庆幸地被你们选中任这职位)I will fully(完全地) apply my skills in my work and get the job well done.(做好这份工)