请点评一下这篇短文liveinasmallhousewhichiswhite.Inthelovelyhouse,thereareacleandiningroom,twobeautifulbedrooms,abiglivingroomandasmallkitchen.MyfamilyandIcanwatchTVinthelivingroomandwecanhaveourdinners

Question

请点评一下这篇短文
live in a small house which is white.In the lovely house,there are a clean dining room,two beautiful bedrooms,a big living room and a small kitchen.My family and I can watch TV in the living room and we can have our dinners in the dining room.In the beautiful bedrooms,we can sleep well,and have good dreams.My mum can cook many nice things in the litchen.

Answer 1

我觉得首先你是四年级的话还是很不错的,但是文章里存在不少问题,但是由于时年纪,我就不深说了,但是一些语法点还是给你提一下.
there are a clean dining room,two beautiful bedrooms,a big living room and a small kitchen.
这句话似乎没什么问题,但是实际问题很大,are a 在一起,产生歧异,这句话应该改成.There are five rooms in my family,they are .这样说才明白啊.
其次,dinners 不可数.
最后,litchen.拼写错误kitchen.
最后总结一下,词汇太简单而且用得不太准确,但是你时年纪,还是写的很不错,可以鼓励一下的,西西