英文作文功课:我的梦想旅行.老师们可不可以替我改改.花了一大段时间终於写好了,我的英文很差,身边又没人懂英文.因为老师说要找其他人看看,唯有贴上百科给大家看看Title:MyDreamVacation老

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英文作文功课:我的梦想旅行.老师们可不可以替我改改.
花了一大段时间终於写好了,我的英文很差,身边又没人懂英文.因为老师说要找其他人看看,唯有贴上百科给大家看看
Title:My Dream Vacation
老师说不用写太多地方,把去过的地方写出来就可以,最重要全过去式.
My Dream Vacation
June 3 2011
My first dream vacation was in 2010,when I spent my 21st birthday in Taipei.
Taipei was a beautiful city,it has a shopping center ,a hot-spring ,a museum ,night market ,zoo,theme park…..
I take the airplane to Taipei.Taipei weather was so hot on June.
My Favorites activities was went to hot-spring in beitou,It emits the sulfur mist all year round.The place was bestowed with abundant hot spring resources.It was called "the hot spring village".
Taipei has many museum and Memory.I take MRT to museum and zoo ,
I went to Sun Yat-sen Memorial Hall,National Palace Museum and National Museum of History.I surprised china history when I saw the National Palace Museum.It houses the world's largest collection of priceless Chinese art treasures,one which spans China's nearly 5000-year history.
When I went to finish the museum,I went to the Taipei Zoo.The Taipei Zoo was the largest city zoo in Asia.When I entering the grounds,I saw a popular panda facility.I take the visitors' tram went to watched the Penguin House African,Australian,Desert Animal Areas,because cannot see that animal in Hong Kong.
My Favorites food was Taiwan Snacks,,Steamed Sandwich,Oyster Omelet,Stinky Tofu,Pearl Milk Tea was a major ingredient in night markets.So I went to visit one of the many night markets in Taiwan
I buy a postcard and bookmark bring back for your family and friends.I buy many Taiwan snacks for myself.
我的英文很差,相信有很多地方不足,但已经很用心写了,请大家多多指教/_\

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我帮你改了一下.
My Dream Vacation
June 3 2011
My first dream vacation was in 2010, when I spent my 21st birthday in Taipei.
Taipei is a beautiful city, and it has a shopping center , a hot-spring ,a museum ,night markets , a zoo, and theme parks…..
I took the airplane to Taipei. Taipei was really hot in June.
My favorite activities was to go to hot-spring in Beitou. The place was bestowed with hot spring resources, and so tt was called "The Hot Spring Village".
Taipei have many museums and it gave me a big impression. I took the MRT to museum and zoo,
and I also went to the Sun Yat-sen Memorial Hall, the National Palace Museum and the National Museum of History. I was surprised of China's history when I saw the National Palace Museum. It has the world's largest collection of priceless Chinese art treasures, which includes one which spans China's nearly 5000-year history.
After the museum, I went to the Taipei Zoo. The Taipei Zoo is the largest city zoo in Asia. When I entered the grounds, I saw a popular panda facility. I took the visitors' tram to see the Penguin House, and also the African, Australian, Desert Animal Areas. Mainly because we cannot see those animals in Hong Kong, so I enjoyed the trip a lot.
My favorites food are Taiwan snacks, Steamed Sandwich, Oyster Omelet, Stinky Tofu, and Pearl Milk Tea. Those were favorites in night markets. I went to visit one of the many night markets in Taiwan, too.
I bought a postcard and a bookmark for my family and friends, and I bought many Taiwan snacks for myself, too.
搂主我改了一下你的文法问题哦~ 以后要注意过去式和现代式词的使用方法.