帮忙看下有没有语法错误.一段话.Hello,everyone!Iamenjoystandingheregivingaspeach.IthinkIamveryfunny.Ialsoliketohavefriendswhoarehumorous.MyfavoritesingerisJaychou.Heisgreat.Ithinkheisverytalentedandcreat

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帮忙看下有没有语法错误.一段话.
Hello,every one!I am enjoy standing here giving a speach.I think I am very funny.I also like to have friends who are humorous.
My favorite singer is Jay chou.He is great.I think he is very talented and creative.
I like to do sports.Because I am very active.I always play basketball at P.E.class.
Do you want to become my friends?If your answer is "Yes".Than I were very happy.
That is all.Thank you.

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I (am 去掉) enjoy standing here giveing a (speech).
I think I am very funny.( I think it would be fun to be my friends.我想和我做朋友会很有意思.)
I like to do sports.Because I am very active.( because 太强调因果关系,还是用 as 比较适合,两句话不用断开,改：I like to do sports as I'm very active.)
play basketball ( at 改 in ) P.E.class.
Do you want to become my friends?( 用词太生硬了,改 would you like to be my friends?would you like ...你愿意...是一种婉转征求别人意见的问句.)
If your answer is "Yes".Than I were very happy.( if 引导的条件从句不要跟主句用句号断开啊.than 是比较,then才是“那么、就”,但有了if 就不需要 then.改：If your answer is "Yes",that will be my honor.如果你的答案是“是”,那将是我的荣幸.)