研究生面试英语自我介绍,已完成,求修改!采用者另加50分!如题,希望能改正：1.错误的地方2.不够生动的地方.习惯用法什么的.——————————————————————Goodmorning,myrespe

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研究生面试英语自我介绍,已完成,求修改!采用者另加50分!
如题,希望能改正：
1.错误的地方
2.不够生动的地方.习惯用法什么的.
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Good morning,my respected professors!It is my honor to be here for your interview.First,let me introduce myself to you.My name is Zhangjing,22 years old,I come from Luoyang city,it is a famous tourist city.I will finish my undergraduate education in Luoyang Institute of Technology this June.Now,I am doing my best to obtaining a chance to attend Nanjing University of Architecture and Technology.
In the past 4 years,most my time has been spent on study or campus activities.But I also used vacation time to some decorating companies doing internships.I am a hard working student especially do the thing I am interested in.I will try my best to finish it no matter how difficult it is.When I was sophomore,I found Environmental Art Design very interesting,so I learned it very hard.At that time,the main direction is doing something about the interior design.Such as commercial space,home decoration and so on.
As to my characters,I don’t want to use any beautiful word to praise myself.Just like my father,I strive to be an honest,upright and modest man.In my spare time,I like football,table tennis and Chinese chess.Also English songs and movies are my favorite.
‘Life is like a box of chocolates.You never know what you're gonna get’.However,I always believe I should cherish my time,and sense any change for self-development,I tried to have a good prospect.
Diligence is the mother of success,Efficiency is the only way.
That is all for my self-introduction,Thank you for giving me this opportunity!Thank you!

Answer 1

第六行：most my time改为most of my time,紧接着" But I also used vacation time to some decorating companies doing internships."改为But I also interned during vocation in some decorating companies.
倒数第四行”sense any change“最好改为seize any chances.紧接着过去式应改为现在完成式：I have tried to……
总体还不错.
Good luck to you .Hope you will be successful.