谁能帮我看看我这篇英语作文错了没有,有哪里不对的?Therearethreepeopleinmyfamily,myfather,mymotherandme.MynameisYeDan,Iam21yearsoldtoday,nowinaschool,IlikesurfingtheInternetandshopping.Myfather

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谁能帮我看看我这篇英语作文错了没有,有哪里不对的?
There are three people in my family, my father, my mother and me. My name is Ye Dan, I am 21 years old today, now in a school, I like surfing the Internet and shopping. My father in a working station, he is 49 years old this year, he likes to read novels online. My mother is a company 's accounting, she is 46 years old this year, her work very tired, but she insisted, she liked watching movies on the Internet, she always take care of we are one family life. I love my mom and Dad, because their daily hard work is for me, so I want to be a good child,

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第一处,"my mother,and I"~"I" 是做主语的;第二处,"I am 21 years old today"~好像你不只是今天是二十一岁吧?第三处,应在"my father"与"in a working station"间加一个"is"~应在主语后加一个谓语动词;第四处,把"accounting"改为"accounter"~这应该是个职务吧?第五处,在"her work"与"very tired"间加入"is"~还是谓语动词;第六处,把"insisted"改为"insisis"~这是一般现在时的;第七处,把"she liked"改为"she likes"~一般现在时+第三人称单数;第八处,把"take care of"改为"takes care of"~"always"只表示一般的情况,故用一般现在时+第三人称单数;第九处,"daily hard work"改为"daily hard working"~"hard working"习惯用法.呃,看起来有问题的句子还有点多,不过要多加练习,不要怕错,这样就能写好作文!相信自己!