求高人帮忙看下有没有语法错误看下还能怎么修改下Goodmorning,dearteachers,mynameisXX,thisyear21yearsold,IcomefromBeijingandMyhomeisintheCapitalAirportthenMyparentsbothworkattheairportIgraduatedfrom

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求高人帮忙看下有没有语法错误 看下还能怎么修改下
Good morning,dear teachers,my name is XX,this year 21 years old,I come from Beijing and My home is in the Capital Airport then My parents both work at the airport I graduated from Beijing City University .I have a lively and happy-go-lucky personality,I am very glad to know you all,I am very interested in Airline stewardess this work,I believe I am the best.I hope I can pass this interview,thank you

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没有标点,让我老是误解你的表意,还好有大小写字母区分
1.this year 21 years old →21 years old this year 比较顺溜,最好用同位语形式表达：a 20-year-old student this year
2.My parents both work at the airport → worked
3.in Airline stewardess this work→in being an Airline stewardess
或in the job as an Airline stewardess
4.最后这句话反倒觉得没什么底气,另外,面试应该多介绍下自己的优势之类的吧