六级作文就一段请各位大侠看看有什么语法上的问题伐?Everyyear,therearealotofgraduatescomingtothecurrentsociety.Someofthemarewillingtostrivefortheirbetterlifebythemselves,butnowmoreandmoregraduatescho

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六级作文就一段 请各位大侠看看有什么语法上的问题伐?
Every year,there are a lot of graduates coming to the current society.Some of them are willing to strive for their better life by themselves,but now more and more graduates choose to live together with their parents.

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a lot of 后接不可数名词.改为many吧~
还有,越来越在英语里表达是MORE,我们老师说不要用MORE AND MORE.
coming to the current society.这句话表达的很别扭,用entering 吧.