从句太多,请问下面这句话有无语法错误?AgoodcaseinpointisthatMrLi,oneofmyfriendslivesinAmerica,usedtobuylatestfashions,electronicproductsinparticular,suchastheiPhone,theiPadandtheMacbook,buthehasgivenupthis

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从句太多,请问下面这句话有无语法错误?
A good case in point is that Mr Li,one of my friendslives in America,used to buy latest fashions,electronic products inparticular,such as the iPhone,the iPad and the Macbook,but he has given upthis hobby since the beginning of 2009,due to the decrease of his incomeaccompanied by the credit crisis.

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A good case in point is that Mr Li,one of my friends 【living】 in America,【who】 used to buy latest fashions,electronic products in particular,such as iPhone,iPad and Macbook,has given up this hobby since the beginning of 2009,due to decrease of income 【along with】 credit crisis.