帮我修改一下这篇自我介绍Hello,everyone.MynameisXXX.I’mXXyearsold.Inmysparetime,Ilikelisteningtomusic,sinceitcanhelpmenotonlyunwindmystressbutalsoadjustmymindset.likewise,Ilikedrawingpictures,obviousistha

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帮我修改一下这篇自我介绍
Hello,everyone.My name is XXX.I’m XX years old.In my spare time,I like listening to music,since it can help me not only unwind my stress but also adjust my mindset.likewise,I like drawing pictures ,obvious is that it is interesting to put the real things on my papers.what's more,I love animals,expecially cats,I find they are cute .We should protect the animals.Honestly to say,I’m a little girl who is a little shy,so I join in this contest to improve myself.I’m fond of meeting and making more friends during this contest.Meanwhile,I hope all of us can do well in the contest.Thank you!

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Hello,everyone.My name is XXX.I’m XX years old.In my spare time,I like listening to music,since it can help me not only unwind my stress but also adjust my mindset.Likewise,I like drawing pictures,for the obvious reason that it is interesting to put real things on papers.What's more,I love animals,expecially cats,I find them really cute.We should protect animals.Honestly,I'm a little girl who is a little shy,so I join this contest to improve myself.I’m fond of meeting and making more friends during this contest.Last but not least,I hope all of us can do well in the contest.Thank you!