初中英语作文改错!Westudytoolongeverydayandundertoomuchpressure.Proficientsadviseustochooserightwaystorelaxourselves.TerrylikeswatchingTVandplayingcomputergamesandhethinksthesearegoodwaytorelaxhimself.Inmy

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初中英语作文改错!
We study too long every day and under too much pressure.Proficients advise us to choose right ways to relax ourselves.Terry likes watching TV and playing computer games and he thinks these are good way to relax himself.In my opinion,watching TV and playing computer games are not good ways to help
us relax because they are bad for your eyes to watch for a long time .Terry also thinks hanging out with friends is the way for students to relax .I like hanging out with my best friends too and I sometimes go shopping with them.Everyone have different ways to relax .
大神能纠错的同时顺便帮忙想个结尾嘛?...

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初中的英语作文能写成这样就很不错了.没有什么大的问题,做一些语序上的调整和纠正个别语法错误就好：
We study under too much pressure for too long every day.Proficients advise us to choose right ways to relax ourselves.Terry likes watching TV and playing computer games.He thinks these are good ways to relax himself.In my opinion,neither watching TV nor playing computer games is a good way to help us relax because they are bad for your eyes when staring at the screen for a long time.Terry also thinks hanging out with friends is the way for students to relax.I like hanging out with my best friends,too.I sometimes go shopping with them.Everyone has different ways to relax.
结尾很好,不必加其它的内容.