英语作文改正,这个作文能得多少分（100满分）?Nowadays,withtheimprovementofthepeople'slivingstandardandevery-changingtheadvanceofhumancivilization,onephenomenoncallforpeople'sattentionthatmoreandmorepeoplechoi

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英语作文改正,这个作文能得多少分（100满分）?
Nowadays,with the improvement of the people's living standard and every-changing the advance of human civilization,one phenomenon call for people's attention that more and more people choice online shopping.
As a matter of fact everyone has his own reason for his choice.people would like online shopping rather than other's way shopping .To them online shopping is of greather importance in that it can save them time.But not everyone shares the sames opinion.others,hate the online shopping,they think that online shopping sometimes is a cheat,and the low price made people indulge in.
As a university student, I'm concerned if all aspect into the account,online shopping seems to be a wise choice and with the technology develop it will an irresistible trend in modern society.therefore,I suggest that people should careful it if you want pleasure and convenience use the way ,only in this way can we without the concern of being cheated.

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语法错误还是蛮多的,这样你即使有亮点也被掩盖了.尤其到后面,错误太多.50分不能再多了.这文还有一个硬伤,就是有几句中式英文的句子.