英语高手来看看这两段话有什么问题么?写作文遇到点问题TATRecently,wehadaninvestigationofthephenomenonabouthavingnobreakfastinalltheSeniorGrade2studentsinourschoolandtheresultshowsthatabouthalfofthes

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英语高手来看看这两段话有什么问题么?写作文遇到点问题TAT
Recently,we had an investigation of the phenomenon about having no breakfast in all the Senior Grade 2 students in our school and the result shows that about half of the students do not have breakfast .
Recently,we had an investigation on all the Senior Grade 2 students in our school about the phenomenon about having no breakfast and the result shows that about half of the students do not have breakfast .
哪个正确呢?还是都不对?那里有问题麻烦说下,

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第一个感觉更好一点.第一句太长了,可以加个逗号
Recently,we had and investigation of the phenomenon about having no breakfast in all the Senior Grade 2 students in our school,and the result shows that about half of the students do not have breakfast.
但这样感觉上,还是有点重复了,因为二年级的学生不吃饭的现象,这个现象重复讲了两次,就是do not have breakfast这个现象,重复了两次以后,就觉得这句话挺繁琐的,不过还是正确的.
我会改成:Recently,we had an investigation of the phenomenon whether all the Senior Grade 2 students have breakfast in our school,the result shows that half of students do not have breakfast.
第二句里用了三个ABOUT...实在是很奇怪,而且很不合适.