求帮批改作文!1.Outdoorrecreationsuchasmountainclimbing,campingandhikingbringusclosertonatureandareidealactivitiestoencouragefamilybonding.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?Anincreasenumberofpeoplechooseoutdoora

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1 .Outdoor recreation such as mountain climbing,camping and hiking bring us closer to nature and are ideal activities to encourage family bonding.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
An increase number of people choose outdoor activities such as skate,rock climbing,hiking as their weekend entertainment.No one can deny that these activities can both provide chances for people to have a deeper understanding of the nature and for family members to know each other very well.
Once we choose outdoor activities,searching information like weather condition of the destination becomes necessary.When we get there,appreciating the beautiful scenery and breathing the fresh air are our main task.If we are lucky enough,we can encounter wild animals which are very rare in downtown.Moreover having outdoor activities can bring us more information about the ecosystem there which is very special for those who live in cities.Anyway,outdoor sports would be our principal choice when we want to get close to the nature.
With the development of the IT,more and more people prefer connect their families by the Internet ,like e-mail or the MSN.This kind of connection makes people feel more lonely,many people think,even though they often ‘meet’ each others on the Internet.Getting together in the real world or having some sports outside together,such as surfing or biking is more useful for family members get away from lonely.A BBQ or camping could be good choices which conduct more face-to-face conservations.Conservations are always ideal ways to make the relationship closer.
In conclusion,it is the outdoor sports that impel families to have a closer relationship and offer us opportunities to have a general understanding of the nature.
是雅思作文，要是能提出提高意见就更好了。我现在正在每天背新概念4上的文章，用以提高写作，同时提高口语，不知道大家有没有别的方法提供提供。

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第1行主语是Outdoor recreation,单数,后面的谓语也要改成单数形式.第4行increasing.skating.第6行nature去掉冠词the.第10行tasks.第12行cities加冠词the.第13行nature去掉冠词the.第14行IT去掉冠词the；connecting....