雅思大作文一篇,看能不能上6分!马上就要考试了!感激不尽!题目是剑8Test3的大作文：Increasethepriceofpetrolisthebestwaytosolvegrowingtrafficandpollutionproblems.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?Whatot

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雅思大作文一篇,看能不能上6分!马上就要考试了!感激不尽!
题目是剑8Test3的大作文：Increase the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree?What other measures do you think might be effective?
以下是我的不才之作：
When it comes to the traffic and pollution problems,there are a nuber of approaches to solving it.From my perspective,the ascent of petrol price probably is an acceptable method.Howerver,wo should do more than it.
As for the increasing number of the price of petrol,to a large extent,there are enormous benefits from it,in terms of the declined the number of on-road cars.Take my family as an example,as the petrol goes up these days,we are more inclined to take public transport,which is able to save us much cost.
Nevertheless,only using this way cannot meet the need of the reduction of traffic andpulution,which is not to deal with the root of the problem.Therefore,other factors should be considered as well.First and foremost,the road capacity should be enlarged that growing number of cars can be driven on the road at the same time.Another efficient approach,as for transport department,there should be more strict punishment to be enforced.In other words,the rude passers and drivers would pay more attention totheir transport behaviours or they would be fined and educated if breaking the rules.
Speaking of the interior aspect,it is also critical to improve the awareness of the public to obey the transport rules,which is the basic solution.Only this sort of sence are being upgraded,no matter in a rush hour or in a narrow street,the transport condition would be in order.
As a whole,both exterior and interior factors are essential for the ongoing problem involving traffic and pollution.Therefore,it is still a practical issue to be coped with for a long time.

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感觉有6或以上（6.5?）,句子灵活度,词汇,语法,内容四方面都可以,很少低级语法错误（nuber-->number,pulution-->pollution）.不过建议最后一段能再点一下题,也就是说直接回答题目问的问题,明确表明你是同意还是不同意,并且简单总结一下你提出的其他有效方法.不过你首段也有提到,所以问题不是很大.

真正考试的作文分要看小作文和大作文的总体表现,还有临场发挥,注意时间、字数和不要跑题.加油~