请判下我的英语作文AlecturewillbeholdatLongZongsquareform7:00pmto9:00pm.ThislectureisaboutknowlageA(H1N1)andhowpreventit.MrLiisafamousdoctorandexpertformCFCAPwillholdthislecture.Ithinkitisaveryusefulle

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请判下我的英语作文
A lecture will be hold at Long Zong square form 7:00pm to 9:00pm.This lecture is about knowlage A(H1N1) and how prevent it.Mr Li is a famous doctor and expert form CFCAP will hold this lecture.I think it is a very useful lecture to us.We can learn many knowledge about A(H1N1).And we can prevent it better.You should take your mask.If you have a fever,please don't attend the lecture.
这是篇通知.我知道我很菜,所以请把错误都指出来,我好改,

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1.A lecture will be hold at Long Zong square form 7:00pm to 9:00pm（哪一天?）
2.This lecture is talking about A(H1N1) and teach us how to prevent it.
3.the holder ,Mr Li ,is a famous doctor and expert form CFCAP,who has full experience.
4.many knowledge (knowledge 是不可数名词不能用many修饰.应为much knowledge)
5.And we can prevent it better(and 改为so)