帮我看看我有没有地方写错的!谢谢!我要用现在进行时写!ndMyOlympicsAug.12BeijinghasthepowertoholdOlympicgamesin2001andgettheholdquali

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帮我看看我有没有地方写错的!谢谢!
我要用现在进行时写!
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My Olympics Aug.12
Beijing has the power to hold Olympic games in 2001 and get the hold qualification of 2008 Olympic games. China shows its performace to world in 2008.
Raising weight games stars on the night of opening Beijing Olympic games in 2008. Many people are watched. They are excited.
Now it was “Zhang Xiangxiang” many people: “Zhang Xiangxiang, Zhang Xiangxiang”, he is from China. He is Chinese lifter.
ZHANG Xiangxiang of China's weightlifting athletes cite the first time on the clean and jerk 169 kg cited, the other players can’t go beyond him, he has locked the gold medal. His second would be prepared to break the record!To see this scenario, many people call to: "ZHANG Xiangxiang refueling and refueling"
At Last Zhang Xiangxiang won the match. He is the winner,yeah!

Answer 1

老兄错误地方真不少.
给我15分钟,我慢慢给你找.
Beijing has the power to hold Olympic games in 2001 and get the hold qualification of 2008 Olympic games.
既然是 in 2001 ,为什么has和get不用过去时?
Raising weight games stars on the night of opening Beijing Olympic games in 2008.
starts,拼写错误
我明白你这句话想说什么,不过恐怕老外不明白.
Many people are watched.
这里应该是watching吧.
Now it was “Zhang Xiangxiang” many people:“Zhang Xiangxiang,Zhang Xiangxiang”,he is from China.He is Chinese lifter.
前面用was,后面用is,时态相当混乱
还有名词前面要用a的
另外,many people:“Zhang Xiangxiang,这句话一看就是中文格式英文词.
我有事情要出去,没法再给你找了.
不过你的问题确实不少,特别是语法和动词词组方面.建议多阅读,更要夯实基础!基础!基础现在对你很重要!