NewconceptEnglsh2,第19课摘要写作.求英语前辈们点评一下.Theplaywasgoingtobeginatanymoment.Iaskedfortwotickets.Therewerenotanyleft.Susanandmeweredisappointed.Amanhurriedtotheticket-officejustthen.Hereturn

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New concept Englsh 2 ,第19课 摘要写作.求英语前辈们点评一下.
The play was going to begin at any moment.I asked for two tickets.There were not any left.Susan and me were disappointed.A man hurried to the ticket-office just then.He returned two tickets.They were for next Wednesday’s performance.I bought them.

Answer 1

1,别总是用一种句式,尤其全部都是简单句.
2,尝试着用一些从句或多一些表情感的词语类,可以让句子更丰富更富有情感.
3,句子之间试着用一些连词衔接,这样上下句子意思会更连贯
第三句有点小错误：But there isn't any ticket left.如果是我,我可能会直接说：There's nothing left.这样更简洁些.
第四句有点小错误,改为：Susan and I.
你再试着按照我说的,修改下看看效果.