能帮我修改作文吗,要学问好一点的来哦.中文版：读《洋葱头历险记》有感故事中的洋葱头,是一个活泼开朗,聪明机智,有正义感的小男孩.故事中,洋葱头的爸爸——老洋葱因无意中踩了柠檬王

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能帮我修改作文吗,要学问好一点的来哦.
中文版：读《洋葱头历险记》有感
故事中的洋葱头,是一个活泼开朗,聪明机智,有正义感的小男孩.故事中,洋葱头的爸爸——老洋葱因无意中踩了柠檬王一脚而被关进大牢.在探监时,老洋葱对他的儿子说：“孩子,柠檬王的监牢里关的都是正直的人,柠檬王他把强盗、杀人犯养在他的宫廷里,正直的人到要坐牢……”
打那以后,洋葱头就想方设法救老洋葱出来.他在一路上交了很多朋友,也遇到过很多意外.老田鼠帮他凿洞,救大伙出来；小樱桃和小草莓帮他交罚款；老蜘蛛帮他送信……这一切发生得坎坎坷坷,遇到过许多次障碍,也遇到过许多次失误.这对于洋葱头来说,都是刻骨铭心的事.
虽然我们也遇到过很多障碍,很多次失败,但时间总是在继续的,事情没有结尾是不可能的,对于你来说,只要能做的更好,就是一次成功.当我们把重点抓住,帮助别人顺利完成一件好事也是一种喜悦.当你发现自己的精力不够用,需要别人的帮助时,大胆的说出来吧!别畏惧!上帝会给你机会的!
洋葱,是一样令人讨厌的东西.这不仅是在它那刺鼻的腥,更是在于它会让用刀切它的人掉眼泪.然而,鲜美的味道又令人垂涎欲滴,就算是流眼泪,也忍不住去尝一尝.洋葱头,同样地,也会令人掉眼泪,但,他那美好的品质不正像洋葱鲜美的味道吗?
英文版：Read "The Adventures of Onion" Thoughts
Stories onion, is a lively, cheerful, clever, with a sense of a small boy. Story, the father of onion - inadvertently stepped on by the old onion lemon kick king was put in jail. In the visits, the old onion on his son said: "My child, the king's prison lemon relations are of integrity, lemon king he robber, murderer kept in his court, the integrity of the person to go to prison ... ... "
Since then, onion head out to find ways to save the old onion. He made many friends along the way, also encountered a lot of accidents. Old vole holes for him, to save everyone out; small cherry and strawberry to help him pay a small fine; old spider to help him deliver a letter ... ... it all happened too rough Ke Hum, obstacles encountered many times, has also encountered many turnovers . This onion is, things are unforgettable.
Although we have encountered many obstacles, many times failed, but time always continue, things are not ending Buke Neng, and for you, the Zhi Yao can do better, Jiushiyici success. When we focus caught the successful completion of a good thing to help others is also a joy. When you find your energy is not enough, need help from others, the bold honest! Do not fear! God will give you a chance!
Onion, is the same annoying thing. This is not only in its pungent fishy that, even with a knife it is that it makes people cry. However, the delicious taste of another mouth watering, even tears can not help to try it. Onion, again, will cause tears, but he was not just as good quality delicious onion taste it?

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