请帮我检查一下这篇小作文有没有句法错误,Goodafternoon!MynameisBianhao,mynumberis201402450.Itisreallyagreathonortohavethisopportunitytointroducemyself.Iamanquietgirl.AndIhavealittleshy.Inmysparetime.Ili

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请帮我检查一下这篇小作文有没有句法错误,
Good afternoon!My name is Bianhao,my number is 201402450.It is really a great honor to have this
opportunity to introduce myself.
I am an quiet girl.And I have a little shy.In my spare time.I like reading books,especially those about history.In addition,I think I'm a good student and I'm great honest to others.Also I can work well under great pressure and
I'd like to face any sudden challenges.
As for my dream,I want to be a nurse.Although the nurse are not as great as the scientist.But they are clean and white.If I were a nurse,I would take care of the people in need and give them happiness.I think life in fact don’t need too much,as long as healthy and alive,is a kind of rich.
That’s all.Thanks a lot .

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I am an quiet gir,And I have a little shy
有错.an 改为a,And改为and因为是一句话..I like reading books克身略books,因为reading有这意思.I think I'm a good student and I'm great honest to others,可省略掉 I'm great,句子重复臃肿,去掉but,因为although和but不能连用,is a kind of rich 前面可加which