帮忙看下我的英文简历这是我的英文简历,麻烦高手们帮我看下,看看有没有什么用词、语法、结构上的错误,同时对简历给点建议,RESUMEChineseName:CHENGWANGGender:MaleAge:20MobilePhone:(86)13880126663Tel:(

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帮忙看下我的英文简历
这是我的英文简历,麻烦高手们帮我看下,看看有没有什么用词、语法、结构上的错误,同时对简历给点建议,
RESUME
Chinese Name:CHENG WANG
Gender:Male Age:20
Mobile Phone:[phone] Tel:[phone] (86)028-85414056
Address:Room Vice-303,Building East-4,Sichuan University,Chengdu 610064
Education:
2005.9----2009.7 Life Science and Technology Base of Basic Science Major in Sichuan University
Scholarships and Awards:
2005.9 Enrollment scholarship of school(second-class)
2007.6 College Football Champion
Language Level:CET-6
Computer Level:Proficient in the operation of Office sofeware
Campus Activities：
2005-present.Secretary of the Youth Association of Life Science of students' union:
2007.Participated in the organization work of “The Visit to Chengdu research base of giant panda breeding”;
2006.Participated in the organization work of "Bird-Loving Week"exhibition;
2006.Participated in the organization work of “Distribution of Bookmark in Christmas Eve”activity.
2007.Won the College Football Champion as a player of class team.
2005-present.Volunteer of Fangzhou Volunteers Association of students' union.
2005-present.Member of Literature Association.
Social Activities:
2008.Visited Chengdu DI’AO Pharmaceutical Company,Sichuan Quanxing Group,Chengdu Clover Biopharmaceutical Company and Leshan Changzheng Pharmaceutical Company;
2006.Tought in the surrounding community,
Hobbies:
Football,Basketball,Movies,Readings,Travels etc.
Self Assessment:
Ability to work well with others;mature and resourceful;high sense of responsibility;initiative,independent and good communication skill;strong determination to succeed;willing to learn and progress．
Thank you for your consideration!

Answer 1

格式方面我觉得你还可以去网上找一些范例看看,因为你不是用word编辑的,所以有些地方该居中分栏什么的,还有待商榷.
education方面,你可以简短的介绍一下你的专业性质,因为如果是我,我就对你的专业不了解,你仅说自己毕业于那里,太过苍白.
在awards上面最好添加自己的成绩（系排名,专业排名）,因为从你的获奖情况看,你成绩应该不错,这是你的一个优势,应该予以突出.
computer/English levels 可同归于skills,这样更加清晰.
Campus Activities太过繁琐!会使人丧失阅读兴趣,选其中影响最大的不超过三件来写绝对够了.
Social Activities太过简单,而这恰恰是企业最看重的.我不是说你的经历简单,而是你的叙述太简单.在这一方面,你完全应该花点心思,吸引别人眼球.比如把端盘子说成是在实践中学会服务他人,用心沟通,给别提供就餐方面便.
最后建议添加reference（介绍人）,可与导师商量,让他们做你的reference,因为说不定你的导师就是某企业的顾问.