帮我改下作文,哪里不合适或语法有误就是这篇短文：ThedreamDreamisstrengthItcanbringusalotofpowersonourwaytotheplacewewant.Haveyoueverdreamedofbeingarichman?Haveyoueverdreamedofbeinganicegirl?Mayb

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帮我改下作文,哪里不合适或语法有误
就是这篇短文：
The dream
Dream is strength It can bring us a lot of powers on our way to the place we want.
Have you ever dreamed of being a rich man?Have you ever dreamed of being a nice girl?Maybe you can understand that all the things you think are unrealistic.You may complain about this weak world for you can’t make your dreams become true.We can’t live without dream.We need it.Like the animals can’t live without air.If we have no dream.Then we have the body only.The truth never fails to tell you:If you have never dreamed of flying in the sky.Then you can never fly like a bird.
Edison was dreamed of keeping the sun above our head day and night.So he did it.in order to make his dream become true.He worked hard.
Nothing is impossible!If you ever had a dream.Tried your best to make it become true.
I have a dream,too.I hope to be a pilot.I often dream to fly in the sky the cloud are white and the sky is blue.Whenever I thought about this.I would be exciting .Maybe the dream is far from me.But I know a truth clearly:Nothing is impossible.I believe that I can make it become true if I want.Because I have a dream.
Like the animals can’t live without air.（
改成:Just like the animals can't live without air.可以么？
Edison was dreamed of keeping the sun above our head day and night
到底应该怎么改呢？
用这篇短文参加初中英语作文比赛（市）能否获奖呢

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0.powes改为rpower1.Maybe you can understand that all the things you think (of)are unrealistic.2.If we have no dream.Then we ...(句号改逗号,删除Then ) 3.If you have never dreamed of flying in the sky.T...