求高手指正段落语法错误!好久没学英文了,跪求指导!Withthedevelopmentofinternet,moreandmoresourcesbeofferedfreely,somepeoplebelievechildrenstudyontheinternetathomecanreplaceschool’slearningandschoolisno

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求高手指正段落语法错误!
好久没学英文了,跪求指导!
With the development of internet,more and more sources be offered freely,some people believe children study on the internet at home can replace school’s learning and school is no longer be needed by kids,but I disagree with that point.
It is known that the school is an institution of teaching knowledge.With stable restriction be established by principal and teacher,kids’ good behavior and attitude can be insured.Conversely,studying at home does not have any obvious rule to bound children,it is hard to arrange the progress of children’s study.
Rather than study in front of a computer at home alone,campus is a place which has a group of people at the same age.Social interaction is another ability students would gain in the school.While communicate or play with other kids,children could realize to expressing themselves,physically and emotionally.The benefit from interacted with people would gradually influents children’s whole life.
Though the internet study gives people more space to brainstormed and self-estimate their study project.However,guiding by professional teachers in school would saving more times to study another project for students,it is the high efficiency that the fast changing world required.
In conclusion,that is indeed study in the internet at home is a useful path to seek and fed our brain,but school is still necessary and irreplaceable cause its multiple functions.

Answer 1

第一段be needed 改为 needed