谁能给我改一下语法错误?我要给加州大学发一个邮件改我的个人信息,因为我不小心把我的第一语言填成英语Dearmyfavoritecollegeadmission,I'manapplicantofyouruniversity,andmyApplicationIDis8043616and

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谁能给我改一下语法错误?我要给加州大学发一个邮件改我的个人信息,因为 我不小心把我的第一语言填成英语
Dear my favorite college admission,
I'm an applicant of your university,and my Application ID is 8043616and.I submitted my application yesterday.Upon my checking today,I found out that I made two mistakes in my application in the section of my Personal Information and Family Size& Income as shown below.Since I really really love University of Clifornia,I'm here and hope that I can make revisions of them.
The first problem is that my first spoken language is Chinese,but I clicked the wrong bottom.That's why you see my first spoken language is English and another language instead of Chinese.
The second problem is that the household gross income I entered was supposed to be in dollar,but in RMB.That's why I'm not going to apply the financial need.I'm afraid the mistake would give me unfavorable status.
Love you,
Yu Zeng
11,28,2011
(You can also call me Zerlina,that's my English name)

Answer 1

Dear Sir/Madam,
I have turned in my UC application online and got my Application ID:8043616.However,I realized that I put wrong information in My Personal Information and Family Size & Income after the application was completely submitted.I tried to change the information online but there was no way to come back to these two sections again.
I am worried about the two mistakes because I thought the wrong information I turned in would have a negative impact on my application result.Can you give me some instruction on how to fix those problems?
Thank you very much!
Sincerely,
(Your name)