急求英语达人帮忙修改作文~请英语达人帮忙修改下作文,谢谢!Dearjhon,Ihavebeenyourfamilyteacherfornearlyamonth.inthisperiodoftimewegetalongwith,ihaveknownyoubetter.Nowi'mwrittingtoyoutotalkwithyouhe

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急求英语达人帮忙修改作文~
请英语达人帮忙修改下作文,谢谢!
Dear jhon,I have been your family teacher for nearly a month.in this period of time we get along with,i have known you better.Now i'm writting to you to talk with you heart to heart.
you are a lively boy who is full of curiosity.you are interested in everything,cartoon,computer games,for instance,but except your study.up to a point,i can understand you.you are only a 13-year-old boy,but you have to sit in the classroom for more than 8 hours and do so much homework after school.Even your weekends have to give way to various extra classes.I suppose few people would have interest in things what impose huge pressure on him.However,we have no alternative but to adjust to chinese educational system. Let's talk about your study.Sometimes you are quiet enough to review your lessons but sometimes you are so active that I could hardly calm you down to concentrate on your homework.Generally speaking,you just can be considerated as the hardworking.Beacause of that,you have made such a great progress which shows your mind is brilliant enough to be qualified for your schoolwork in your math and English in the last exam that it inspires you deeply and stimulates your strong interest in math,eventhough the score doesn't come up to your mather's expectation.So you see,you can become interested in something you dislike before after you have made some success on it.
When it comes to your mother,it seems that your parents are always busy.I even never see your dad or mom back home till I leave at 8:30 p.m. Nevertheless,they love you so much that they provide you enough pocket money,the best food and all kinds of toys.They employ me to help you with your homework.All they have done is to make you to live a happy life and chieve a higher score at school.
下面还需在写一段 大概一百多字,可以的话也帮帮忙~谢谢!

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Dear Jhon,
I have been your family teacher for nearly a month.In this period of time we get along well(with改为well),I have known you better.Now I'm writting (删除to you)to talk with you heart to heart.
You are a lively boy who is full of curiosity.You are interested in everything,cartoon,computer games,for instance,but except your study.Up to a point,I can understand you.You are only a 13-year-old boy,and（but改为and） you have to sit in the classroom for more than 8 hours and do so much homework after school.Even your weekends have to give way to various extra classes.I suppose few people would have interest in things what impose huge pressure on them（him改为them）.However,we have no alternative but to adjust to Chinese educational system. Let's talk about your study.Sometimes you are quiet enough to review your lessons but sometimes you are so active that I could hardly calm you down to concentrate on your homework.Generally speaking,you just can be considerated as a hardworking person(加上person).Beacause of that,you have made such （a删除） great progress which shows your mind is brilliant enough to be qualified for your schoolwork in your math and English in the last exam that it inspires you deeply and stimulates your strong interest in math,even though the score doesn't come up to your mather's expectation.So you see,you can become interested in something you dislike （before删除） after you have achieve（made改为achieve） some success in（on改为in） it.
When it comes to your mother（本句不知是什么意思?）,it seems that your parents are always busy.I even never see your dad or mom back home till I leave at 8:30 p.m. Nevertheless,they love you so much that they provide you with（加上with） enough pocket money,the best food and all kinds of toys.They employ me to help you with your homework.All they have done is to make you （省去to）live a happy life and achieve a higher score at school.
Rgards
Yours
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