可以帮我看一下这一篇英语习作吗?可以是错误与建议,ASEATOneday,Iwentout.Iwasstandingonabus.Iwasnotfellingwell.Thebuswascrowdedwithlotsofpeopleandveryhot.Mylegachedbecauseofstanding.Idon'tlikethesu

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可以帮我看一下这一篇英语习作吗?可以是错误与建议,
A SEAT One day,I went out.I was standing on a bus .I was not felling well.The bus was crowded with lots of people and very hot.My leg ached because of standing.I don't like the sultry weather .But there were many people stand just like me.Young men,young women and teenagers.However,there are always young people stading.The bus stopped,a old woman got on the bus.She had short white hair and leant upon a stick.A young man said"Madam,"and he left his seat at once"Come here,There is a..."Suddenly a woman of middle age sit on the young man's seat.
The young man was very angry"oh,how can you do this,lady?This seat not for you!"
“Well,why I can't sit this seat?It's not yours!”
Young man's face became red.
The old woman said"Oh,child,It's nothing...'”She was smiling.
A woman near the young man stoop up,said"Oh,Madam,you can sit my seat."And she looked at the woman of middle age
The matter was finally settled.I don't think I like that woman,and I think most people don't like her too.

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主语不一致with lots of people and very hot
This seat not for you应该加is吧
The old woman said"Oh,child,It's nothing...'”She was smiling.最好是：she said with smile
Young man's face became red.His face turned red
most people改为most of the people