英语作文请大家帮我改一下语法错误,用（）把错误括起来,满分15分请打分IsitnecessarytocelebratethebirthdayinrestaurantNowmoreandmorestudentshavesomemoneyonhandcomparedwiththepastsoinvitesomefriends

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英语作文请大家帮我改一下语法错误,用（ ）把错误括起来,满分15分请打分
Is it necessary to celebrate the birthday in restaurant
Now more and more students have some money on hand compared with the past so invite some friends to celebrate the birthday is become a fashion ,Is it meaningful?my answer is no it isn't necessary As a student we can't earn the money ourselves.Most of the money is from our parents ,we can use it because the relationship between us and our parents so we must save it .we can chose some cheap way to celebrate our birthday such as making snakes,having a pinic,or making some D-I-Y food by ourselves.they are much meaningful than celebrate it in restaurant In fact the birthday is a day which means you have grew up you should learn a lot more and as far as students is concerned "knowledge is everything " though friends is important did you think those who always stare at your money are really your friends?

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Is it necessary to celebrate (the去掉) birthday in restaurant?
Now more and more students have some money on hand compared with the past,so invite some friends to celebrate (去掉the) birthday (is改为has) become a fashion ,Is it meaningful?my answer is no.it isn't necessary.As a student we can't earn (去掉the） money ourselves.Most of the money is from our parents ,（此处逗号应改为句号）we can use it （because of加上of,因为后面不是一个完整的句子）the relationship between us and our parents.so we must save it .we can (chose原型choose) some cheap way to celebrate our (birthday用复数,birthdays),such as making （snakes蛇?是零食snacks吧）,having a pinic,or making some DIY food by ourselves.they are much meaningful than celebrate it in restaurants.In fact (去掉the） birthday is a day which means you have （grew 改成过去分词grown) up.you should learn a lot more and as far as students is concerned "knowledge is everything ".though friends is important,(did改为do,为什么要用过去式呢） you think those who always stare at your money are really your friends?
1.你要注意断句,标点要标清楚,英语里面,一个句子完了就一定要打句号,一个简单句只能有一个谓语动词；
2.可能是你懒得排版,很多句子首写字母没大写,标题格式也不正确,我没改,你自己可以对着自己课本里面的课文好好看看格式