麻烦,请帮我修改一下我的小作文,China’sNationalDaycelenrations2009Oct1st2009isaworthyofremember,thedayisnumberthe60thNationalDaycelebrationsofChina.Atearlyofthisyear,manyofpeoplebeganparperingforit.Forexa

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麻烦,请帮我修改一下我的小作文,
China’s National Day celenrations 2009
Oct 1st 2009 is a worthy of remember,the day is number the 60th National Day celebrations of China.
At early of this year,many of people began parpering for it.For example,my younger sister is taking parte in the inspect or review troops.They are working carefully all day about 10 hours.Recently they are getting together to performing in the evening of the weekned on the Tian An’men Square.They are working hard and without tiring,shown the unify,painstaking,bravery of the young people.
In the past years,China has achieved many great Shenzhou spacecraft V and Shenzhou spacecraft Ⅵ,to the outer space.On Aug 8st 2008,it succeeded in hold the Olympic Games in Beijing.The Wenchuan earthquake made us more admaney.Although the problem of finance to make every national feel confused and unable to understand it,Chinese people deal with it and developing our economy.
So China will storger and storger,It is not defeated by all the these things and the people of China richer and richerm their life is nappiness and harmonious.

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Chinese National Day in 2009
Oct 1st 2009 is a worthyful day to remember,the day is the 60th National Day of China.
Earlier this year,many of people began to prepare for it.For example,my younger sister participated in the inspect or review troops.They were working hard 10 hours a day.Recently they get together to perform in the evening of the weekend on the Tian An’men Square.They are working hard and without tiring,shown the united,painstaking,bravery of the young persons.(这句完全不知道你要表达的是什么意思,如果有需要请把中文发出来)
In the past few years,China has many great achievments,like Shenzhou spacecraft V and Shenzhou spacecraft Ⅵ which send to the outer space.On Aug 8st 2008,China was holding the Olympic Games successfully in Beijing.The Wenchuan earthquake made all chinese people miserable.Although the financial problem of rebuild Wenchuan may make every other counties feel impossible,Chinese people made it and also make a incredible increasing in our GDP that year.
And China will grow stronger and stronger,It won't defeated by anything.And Chinese people become richer and richer and their life is full of happiness.
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