修改作文（writteninEnglish）Itissaidthatifwethinkofsomethinghardinthedaytime,wewilldreamaboutitatnight.Inthelightofthisstatement,ifsomeonehasanideal（有没有其他表示理想的词?）,itmaycomeintothedream

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It is said that if we think of something hard in the daytime,we will dream about it at night.In the light of this statement,if someone has an ideal（有没有其他表示理想的词?）,it may come into the dream and the dream must be very interesting.
I once had a similar experience.After I had made up my mind to be a computer engineer when growing up,I had a dream in which I had designed a famous software replacing the Windows made by Microsoft Corporation.This software made computers be like people.I could think and make judgement on its own.Then I rose to fame and even the new type of computers were named after me.Not only did I become famous,my country,China,had increased her position(提高了地位是不是这样表达?) of Information Technology.
Although it is only a dream,it is still available because all of the dreams will come true if we work hard.
此为一次90秒自命题演讲,所以希望长度不要变化太大.
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It is said that if we think something serious in the daytime,we would dream about it at night.In the light of this statement,if someone has a hoping（有没有其他表示理想的词?）,it might come into the dream and the dream must be very especially.
Once I had a similar experience.I had dreamed to be a computer engineer when I growing up.I had the dream in which I had designed a famous software replacing the Windows made by Microsoft Corporation.This software made computers be like people.I could think and make a judgement on its own.Then I rosed to fame and even the new type of computers were named after me.Not only did I become famous,but also my country,China,increased her positions(提高了地位是不是这样表达?) of Information Technology.
Although it is only a dream,it is still available for I believe all of the dreams will come true if we work hard.