我自己写的英语作文,请专家改错,（分别指出为什么错了）iwithmysisterwenttojiangxinislandlastweekend.theweatherwasverygood.it'ssunnyandhot.webothbycararriveinjiangxinisland.wehasfinshandriceforlunch

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我自己写的英语作文,请专家改错,（分别指出为什么错了）
i with my sister went to jiangxin island last weekend.the weather was very good .it's sunny and hot .we both by car arrive in jiangxin island.we has finsh and rice for lunch.after that .iwith my sister wenti to the beach .they has too many people .it's quiet a few child in there .i play to tired .but i very happy .my stster didn't to play .because she wonder to eating good food .in the evening.i with my sister went to the theater .we both like listened to music .listen they are the san is very well.net morning.we by bus black to home

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首先我不是专家,估计你这专家二字,吓跑了不少人.但是,修改一下你这篇文章还是可以的
你这篇作文,问题多多啊.
1) i with my sister went to jiangxin island last weekend.句首字母要大写,一般表示两个人一起的时候不用with,而且要把“I”放后面,应该改为：My sister and I went to jiangxin island last weekend.或者改成：I went to Jiangxin Island with my sister last weekend.
2) it's sunny and hot .过去时间用过去时,作文里有很多是时态问题,所以应该是：It was sunny and hot.
3)we both by car arrive in jiangxin island.we has finsh and rice for lunch.after that .iwith my sister wenti to the beach .they has too many people .it's quiet a few child in there .i play to tired .but i very happy .my stster didn't to play .because she wonder to eating good food .in the evening.i with my sister went to the theater .we both like listened to music .
应该修改为：
We arrived in Jiangxin Island by car.We had fish and rice for lunch.Then,my sister and I went to the beach.There were many people,but a few of children were there.After playing on the beach,I was very tired,but I was happy.My sister didn't go to play because she wanted to eat delicious food.In the evening,my sister and I went to the theater.Both of us like listening to music.
4）listen they are the san is very well.这个句子不知道你要表达什么意思.
5）net morning.we by bus black to home 应该改为：The next morning we went back home by bus.