关于托福作文有经验的进本人10.10号就要考了因为先前低估了写作所需要的准备工作现在有些措手不及了这几天看了张红岩的十天搞定托福作文昨天才开始写完整的文章现在发两篇昨天

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关于托福作文 有经验的进
本人10.10号就要考了 因为先前低估了写作所需要的准备工作 现在有些措手不及了 这几天看了张红岩的 十天搞定托福作文 昨天才开始写完整的文章
现在发两篇昨天写的 求估分 批改 给意见（今后几天怎样练习）
第一篇 （因为是第一次花了40分钟 拼错的单词将近十处 发的是拼写错误改过的评分的话按照拼错3个的评）
he issue of whether computers or books contribute more merit to the library is complex and controversial one .On one hand some one consent to the point that books take more advantages on the other hand the view that computers outweigh than books in many ways be supported by others.After carefully considered I concluded that the later one makes more sense I would like to present evidences favoring my thoughts
First and foremost the significant features of computers –convenient-
and efficient can be manifest seen.Are you ever got lost in a confusion and huge library Do you have a experience that the countless books exhausted your energy and interest before you find and read it?This situation is not rare in a library which is lack of computers.As we know the library is open to serve for students.However the shortage of computer always keeping trouble them.Thus some efficient and convenient computers is indispensable
The computer-needed situation not only has terrible impact on readers but also a barrier to the administration of the library itself.
I can not emphasize the importance of computers in the library administration too much in nowadays society background and universities reality.Everything maintain the function of a library require computers .for example renew computer linked with the internet can easily have this work done .
Last but not least with the development of computer technology the book can be input will actually increase in an amazing rate .More computers the library has more knowledge the library hold .compared to books there is no denying that computers have a more bright future
Given factors discussion mentioned above which sometimes intertwine to form the whole and thus become more persuasive we can safely arrive at the conclusion that computers outweigh books in most ways and should be considered first.

Answer 1

The issue of whether build up a new factory takes advantages or disadvantages is a complex and controversial one .On one hand some strongly against this project with many worries .On the other hand others incline to the merits it will bring .I conclude that later one make more sense .In the following discussion I will present evidences favoring my thoughts.
The most significant merit can be manifest seen .The factory is a industry building and the word industry has a lot of meanings such as
a major tax payer great contribution to local economy and so on .
The purpose of building up a factory is crating profit and the hope may be become truth in the future as a result it benefits to people around and government.
The second place once the factory stat to work the need of workers
can quickly benefit the civilize around whether the factory make great profit or not .The advantages is one of the most doubtless and practical one .
Third it is usually acknowledge that a factory .s function depends on several related industry such as service transportation and so on
in this way more and more industry can be attracted to this region
and the benefits is no only about the factory itself but also some other aspects such as the improvement of transportation the prosperity of this district the more systematic fundamental supplies and the district is likely to become the center of the city.
Admittedly there exists some demerits which factory may bring .For example all sorts of pollution.But can we simply blame those to the factory?my answer is not .All this disadvantages crater is people but have noting to do with factory thus what we should do is coming out related strict laws to avoid this escapable troubles.In a word I can not emphasize the merits of a factory too much.
这是第二篇 谢了32分钟 错词的改了 按照错3个评分