我是上次向您请教作文问题的学生上周周考作文如是,请您从内容上给予评价.主题是说一个六旬老人三次失败后第四次参加GRE考试,请对此阐述相关看法.120词左右.Inthe2013GREthereappearsanuncom

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我是上次向您请教作文问题的学生
上周周考作文如是,请您从内容上给予评价.主题是说一个六旬老人三次失败后第四次参加GRE考试,请对此阐述相关看法.120词左右.
In the 2013 GRE there appears an uncommon participant in the exam room ——ZhangShanxue aged 61.（上述是给的开头）It is said that he had fail 3 times before ,while never did the failures stop him from trying again.
Generally,people in their sixties just have everything off but enjoy their life.Therefore,many people doubt if Mr.Zhang's actions could mean anything.
However,it is what I don't agree to.You see,Chinese great writer Suxun just began learning at his eighties.Besides,like great German writer Gothe,not until his eighties did he complete his book Die Faust.Old as they were when they began to learn,they had such spectacular achievements.
Therefore,what Mr.Zhang stands for is probably a strong spirit,which reminds us to keep learning all our life long.Not only will this do good to ourselves,but it'll also make great contributions to our society and country.It's never too old to learn.

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In the 2013 GRE there appears an uncommon participant in the exam room ——ZhangShanxue aged 61.（上述是给的开头）It is said that he【 has failed 】3 times before ,while 【none of 用倒装固然也可,但时态搭配很需斟酌,倒不如用否定表达来的简洁 】the failures【 stops】 him from trying again.
Generally speaking, people in their sixties just have everything off but enjoy their life.Therefore,many people doubt if Mr.Zhang's actions could 【make any sense 用短语比用单个词汇表达效果更好】.
However,it is what I don't agree to.You see, Chinese great writer Suxun in Song Dynasty just began learning at his eighties.Besides, like great German writer Gothe, not until his eighties did he complete his book Die Faust.Old as they were when they began to learn, they had such spectacular achievements.【例证详实有力】
Therefore, what Mr.Zhang stands for is probably a strong spirit,which reminds us to keep learning all our life long.Not only will this do good to ourselves, but it'll also make great contributions to our society and country. It's never too old to learn. 【结论水到渠成】
整体文章写得非常精彩!前面几处时态搭配等稍有不当,或表达不够高档,因此,略作改动.

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