在申请西雅图的king’shighschool.现在需要写一篇类似application的东西,望高人修改.题目是：Whatchildhoodexperiencehasmostchangedyourlife.Inmyprivatememory,thetypicalchildhoodexperiencewhichhasmostchange

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在申请西雅图的king’s high school. 现在需要写一篇类似application的东西,望高人修改.
题目是： What childhood experience has most changed your life.

In my private memory, the typical childhood experience which has most changed my life is the memory of the spring trip. When I was studying in primary school, there were spring trips yearly. On those days, everyone felt exciting, well-being and expecting. In common condition, our class master usually divided us into several groups then gave us different kinds of assignments which must be finished and then handed after the spring trips. In those periods, though we all young kids, we always accomplished the tasks as perfectly as possible. From the experience brought by spring trips, I learned the skills of cooperation and I also obtained the ability of dealing the relationships among my classmates. These helpful capacities bring many advantages to me on my way growing. Thanks to the skills of cooperation, I can get well with the members from studying groups whatever I knew them before or we only strangers and I also learn variety of knowledge from various people. Speaking of the ability of dealing the relationships, I acquire benefits too. As the result of mastering this capacity, I always know the propriety while I communicating with others. After long time, others regard me as a friendly person and always like to establish a humorous relationship with me. I know the experience of spring trips can influence on my whole life and I absolutely understand the meaning of that memory. I believe that I will be a luck person if l can keep this valuable experience in my subsequent life.
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The typical childhood experience which has most changed my life is the memory of the spring trips during my primary school time.
When I was studying in primary school,there were spring trips yearly.On those days,everyone felt excited,well-being and full of expectations.When those days came,our home-class teacher usually divided us into several groups,then gave us different kinds of assignments which must be finished and then handed in after the trips.On those trips,though we were all young kids,we always accomplished the tasks as perfectly as possible.From the experience brought by spring trips,I learned the skills of cooperation and I also obtained the ability of building up the
relationships among with my classmates.These helpful capacities have brought many advantages to me on my way of growing up.Thanks to the skills of cooperation,I could get along well with the members from studying groups,whom I met for the first time or I had known for a long time.I also learned a variety of knowledge from various people.
Speaking of the ability of relationship building,I have gained benefits,too.As the result of building up this capacity,I have gotten to know the propriety while communicating with others.After a while,others would regard me as a friendly person and would like to establish a friendly relationship with me.
I know the experience of the spring trips has influenced me profoundly and I now understand the meaning of that memory.I believe that I will be a lucky person if I can keep this valuable experience for my whole life.