高考作文请点评找出错误并提出改进方案假设你正在参加全省中学生英语演讲比赛,请你针对有些父母经常翻看孩子日记或书包哦这一现象,写一篇演讲稿,陈述你的观点.演讲稿的主要内容

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高考作文 请点评 找出错误 并提出改进方案
假设你正在参加全省中学生英语演讲比赛,请你针对有些父母经常翻看孩子日记或书包哦这一现象,写一篇演讲稿,陈述你的观点.
演讲稿的主要内容应包括：
认为同学们不必为此苦恼,
希望能够体谅父母的苦衷
建议与父母进行交流和共通 词数100字左右,开头结尾已给出不计入词数
GOOD morning ,ladies and gentlemen.
【Some of us are having problems with our parents ,as they often look into our school bags or read our diaries.】Some parents try to do such things ,which make their children feel embarrassed .However,in my point of view we needn't worry about this .On the contrary ,understanding of parents such behavior is very important for us children.
In order to know more about us ,parents almost tried all kinds of methods .Actually ,they just want to give us a hand when we study with great difficulties. For fear of their child gets into trouble in daily life with no help,they are eager to read our diaries so as to give us some sugestions.
Therefore,we should not olny try to understand our parents' behavior but also communicate with them as often as we can. Only in this way can we let our parents fully trust us. I do hope both paprents and children can get on well with each other.
篇高考英语作文 请点评 找出错误 并提出改进方案 并打分（以高考30分评定）
【Thank you !】
明白了 那改成： on the contrary ,it is very important for us to understand our parents. 谁还有好的建议尽管提吧 ,多谢

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understanding of parents such behavior is very important for us children.
这句又错了.parents such behavior 这是个什么结构呢?上次说了不要自己造结构.is very important for 这个也是你自己造的吧.be important to sb.没有用for的.
还是那句话,一定要用你确定而且熟悉的用法,不要为了句子漂亮而乱用.即使是特别简单的句子也比用错的好.